Now to choose the topic of poetry...
**
When All is Said and Done
Dead eyes stare back from the mirror.
The mirror I wanna break.
The mirror I wanna shatter.
I want it to break like my heart did.
I just wanna disappear.
I wanna hide;
from him,
from the world,
from myself.
I look in the mirror,
the dreadful mirror,
and see a stranger.
I see a zombie.
Impossible to look away,
the dead eyes find my soul
and tear it apart -
bit by bit,
piece by piece.
Until I have nothing left.
I look in the mirror,
the painful mirror,
and see a ghost.
The dead eyes are mine.
Nothing is mine.
Nothing but
emptiness,
loneliness,
hurt.
Dead eyes stare back from the mirror.
**
So there's that one. Remember, the category is "Depressed." So it makes sense for the message to be painful. Anywho, leave your comments...
Hey, it's me, your coolest, most awesome reader. And I just want to say, that you write my favorite kind of poetry. I love this style and I think you do it extremly well. Love it! Even though its sad. Also, I liked the repetition of "I look in the mirror/the painful mirror." I don't know why exactly... just... yeah.
ReplyDeleteMy revised free verse. I say revised because even though free verse technically doesn't have a style, my way isn't very typical...still I like it too :) I really liked that too...duh its why I did it! But yeah I like having repetition and a true end...like in this one - tying it back to the beginning. So yeah what I'm saying is I get it :P
ReplyDelete